Delinquent stars peep and blink
At me, outside his rusty door
That has claw marks and dried blood
On it’s weather-beaten, crumbling body.
His door has on it, some charm
The witch-doctor dipped his palms in
And applied.
Like an ointment on a wounded body.
Though rusty and broken in parts
The door doesn’t allow me in
Nor my pleas
Nor my angry kicks,
Nor my amateur black magic
So I tried his dreams instead
Where I knew,
the rat-woman sat sipping wine.
But he has forgotten my face, it seems.
He takes the rat-woman in his arms
And says “who let this witch in?”
Delinquent stars peep and blink
As I go back and claw at his door.
Monday, March 24, 2008
crazily rants The Mad Girl at 11:11 AM
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Why do you go back to clawing at his door??
Aye Aye!
I like the theme. ;)
...awesome
Awwww!
my poem! my poem!
::dances around with glee::
and I still claw.
But someday please claw his eyes out.
Delinquent stars peep and blink
As I go back and claw at his door.
*sigh*
this makes me sad.sighs.
Omigosh! Astounding poem honey.
But I'll tell you something I've been telling Anurima for a lonlong time, (though coming from a junior this might sound PAAKA), NEXT TIME HAMMER HIS DOOR AWAY, PICK HIM UP, THROW HIM INTO THE GUTTER WITH HIS HEAD BASHED IN, AND WALK OFF WITH YOUR HEAD HELD HIGH. you won't need to look back!
The door doesn’t allow me in
Nor my pleas
Nor my angry kicks,
Nor my amateur black magic
So I tried his dreams instead
Very evocative.
But, couldn't she have not gone back?
your poems are compellingly graphic! Great imagery.
but why you be clawing huh?
he is very insensitive!
Ah....I always almost have nothing to say after i read your poems !!! why???
@Inihos-The narrator...like so many other women in love is unable to give up on love. For her it's an obsession, something to busy herself with, a part of her daily existence she can't chuck away.
@Rohit-Thank you very much.:)
@Rahul-Thank you so much.:)
@Sree-awwww back!!:D
@Anu- Yeah I expect she will.:)
@Clouds- Sigh! why darling?
@Basu-Almost all my poems do.:D
@Jadis- hello girl! Great to find your comment.Yes that's a wonderful suggestion, I'll try it if I ever need to, but this girl in my poem is one who can't let go.I'll tell her about your suggestion though.:)
@The soliloquist- Of course she could have not gone back but you see she's so in love that it seems and turns out that she can't.:)
@what's in a name-Thank you very much.:)
@Pongy papaya-That he is,I couldn't agree more.But women do have this abominable habit of falling for insensitive guys.:(.
@Zahid-Realllllllly??????Zahid, I take your speechlessness as a compliment!!
absolutely.precisely the point richarson makes in clarissa:)
well, lemme elucidate 'awww'! I elt sad & wished to hug u & say...what if he didn't recognize u? I'm there na! :) Love u!
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